pandemo (pandemo) wrote,
pandemo
pandemo

Evolution At Work



Tag Line (Original): A well-intentioned, law-abiding do-gooder, twenty-six-year old Despina Mackenzie is a dedicated Iowa schoolteacher who sets out from her horse farm for the Stone Circles Indian Reservation in the Four Corners region of Arizona, intending to do nothing more sinister than teach summer school, but unintentionally falls in love and ends up plotting with the local sheriff to fox the federal government agents dead set on taking the chief's second son's life.

Word Count: 76

sydneydaile’s version: When twenty-six-year old Iowa schoolteacher Despina Mackenzie leaves her 80-acre horse farm for the Stone Circles Indian Reservation of Arizona intending to do nothing more than teach summer school, she finds herself suddenly in love and in cahoots with the local sheriff to stop the federal agents set on taking out the chief's second son.

Word Count: 58

When twenty-six-year old Despina Mackenzie leaves her Iowa horse farm for Arizona’s Stone Circles Indian Reservation, intending to do nothing more than teach summer school, she finds herself suddenly in love and in cahoots with the local sheriff to thwart the federal agents determined to kill the chief's second son.

Word Count: 52

When twenty-six-year old Despina Mackenzie decides to teach summer school on an Indian reservation, she suddenly finds herself in danger, in love and in cahoots with the local sheriff to thwart federal agents determined to kill the chief's second son.

Word Count: 42

A big shout-out of thanks to sydneydaile, who dynamited my writer's block logjam...
Tags: tag line for sotfw - sc
Subscribe
  • Post a new comment

    Error

    default userpic

    Your reply will be screened

    Your IP address will be recorded 

    When you submit the form an invisible reCAPTCHA check will be performed.
    You must follow the Privacy Policy and Google Terms of use.
  • 1 comment